New Release: Tokyo Nights: Season Two

The first episode of Tokyo Nights: Season Two is now available. Unlike the first season spent in the dark shadowy alleys and the bright lights of host clubs, Hisato now has to contend with returning to his day job but with the added bonus of being promoted to Detective. It can only make his life easier or more difficult.

But like my characters this season has been different for me to write. I waited until most of the season had been drafted before beginning editing or publishing the first episode, meaning I won’t feel rushed to write/edit each one to get it out on time. And more time means better care is taken when editing/revising, crafting the words, sentences and paragraphs into something enjoyable – I hope – to read.

Here is a sneak peek at Episode Two and an example of how my draft changes into the finished product after one round of editing. There is so much more to it than simply fixing grammar and spelling.

Before editing:

His words rung with too much truth and the ache in his chest intensified. Hisato stretched his arms above his head, yawning as he blinked back tears. He didn’t need to be thinking about this. Worrying about it. He didn’t believe that Ogawa would place a price on his head, but there were plenty within the Yamashita who’d be more than happy to see him taken out. And just as many outside of it too.

After editing:

Threading truth through his lies made them easier to believe but this time the pain they inflicted on him was almost too much to bear. Hisato stretched his arms above his head and yawned, blinking away tears he couldn’t allow to fall here. He didn’t need to be thinking about this. Worrying about it. Even if he didn’t think Ogawa would place a price on his head, there were plenty within the Yamashita more than happy to do it. His presence amongst their ranks had become uncomfortable once his deception – Ogawa’s decision to let him live – had been revealed and it was only Ogawa that had kept Hisato safe; protected.

Tokyo Nights: Season Two

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Tokyo Nights: Season One

List of Episodes

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